Your Eyes

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    LP4Hope

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    Verse:
    Sitting on a bed in the middle of the night.
    The moon's light doesn't seem to drown out the dark sky.
    Little needs to be said about you and I.
    Might as well accept that you'll never see me eye-to-eye.

    Pre-Chorus:
    And even though the world keeps spinning. I'm drowning in it's lies.

    Chorus:
    I will never get lost in my black soul again.
    You don't have to worry about controlling me.
    Even in the darkness I can still find my way.
    Your Eyes give me reason to keep going.

    Verse 2:
    Walking in the vileness of my own mistakes.
    I can feel the earth shake under my feet.
    And sitting on that park bench is where I always find you.
    Staring off into the distance of the sky so blue.

    Bridge:
    You never really cared, but you saved me anyway.
    Fighting for the hope that I could still live my ways.
    Taking my last breath, is way to scary for me.
    Yet I know that you wont ever miss me.

    ©2011 Jerissa Johnson a.k.a Jeri Johnson

    Just a little thing I came up with. Did some re-writing, and it's a little better now.
    :) ROCK ON!!!
     
    Last edited: Feb 9, 2011
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    Rohit LP

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    dats is nice...abt re-wrriting...well..a little less length on some sentences wil b gr8..
    verse1=win.... dats is :awesome: ..

    so is ur signature..
     
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    LP4Hope

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    Thanks! Yeah, I just came up with it outta no where. First verse is definitely some good stuff. The rest of the song needs some work. But that's like it.
     
    Last edited: Feb 8, 2011
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    You wrote that ???
    Fantastic!!!
     
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    Rohit LP

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    ya..i somehow keep reading 1st verse again nd again..

    happens a lot wid me...somethin strikes..nd i write it down..den build the song around those lines..
     
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    Thank you so much!
     
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    LP4Hope

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    Yeah! The same with me. Cool. :D
     
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    Rohit LP

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    if possible...update d completd version of dis song wen u finish editing nd al...dats wud b n interesing read.
     
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    LP4Hope

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    Ya, sure. I'll do that.
     
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    LP4Hope

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    Okay I did a lot of editing...Do you like it better? I kinda want the verses to be long, because I think it suites the music for the song, that I made for it.
     
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    Rohit LP

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    yeah...much..much better..the meaning kinda flows pretty well....

    bridge n verse2 is amazin..
     
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    Ah, Cool! Thanks. I think I like it better too.
     

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