Behind The Moon

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    Esaul

    Esaul New Member

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    [.verse 1.]
    The sun tries to hides from
    the people, behind the moon.
    Just how I try to hide
    my face from you.
    It's just a thrill how I find this
    to be so thrilling.
    A hunger that has an
    appetite to be so filling.
    It's a type of hate
    not the kind how you hate the fame.
    More like the hate that makes
    you wanna erase your name.(Forever)

    [.chorus.]
    I hate myself
    and everyone around me.
    I'm standing on solid ground
    trying to be
    everything you could see in me.
    Rather be stuffed in a closet
    waiting to deposit
    every single one of these rhymes,
    to replace all the times
    I've had to cut myself
    to prove to you,
    to prove to you.

    [.Verse 2.]
    Single times,
    Single rhymes,
    that are full of hate.
    Can't relate to something
    as blissful as your traits.
    But behind the face of smiles
    Lies a black lie,
    that keeps you asking why,
    and wants you to try,
    because demise is the little devil,
    that'll break you soon.
    So cover the face of smiles
    and keep it behind the moon.(Forever)

    [.chorus.]
    I hate myself
    and everyone around me.
    I'm standing on solid ground
    trying to be
    everything you could see in me.
    Rather be stuffed in a closet
    waiting to deposit
    every single one of these rhymes,
    to replace all the times
    I've had to cut myself
    to prove to you,
    to prove to you.

    [.bridge.]
    Everything is falling apart
    suddenly it's running me.(x8)

    [.chorus.]
    I hate myself
    and everyone around me.
    I'm standing on solid ground
    trying to be
    everything you could see in me.
    Rather be stuffed in a closet
    waiting to deposit
    every single one of these rhymes,
    to replace all the times
    I've had to cut myself
    to prove to you,
    to prove to you.(x2)
     
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    Mrs.Shinoda

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    hey! that's pretty good. i can relate to it. good job and keep it up!
     
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    Esaul

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    Thanks.
     
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    numbfuse

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    Real good... ;)
     
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    Methybrea

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    Good description and stuff, but a few repetitive words ('hate' for example) are a setback IMO. 7/10 :)
     
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    LPNeSSRGB

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    Nice job. Keep writing and you'll get even better! :) 8/10
     
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    Esaul

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    Thanks alot guys. :mike:
     

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