Closing The Door

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    chaosblade

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    Stumbled upon this site while looking for some LP wallpapers. Site looks great, i intend to hang around :)

    Anyway for my first post ill bring you a song i wrote some time ago (only lyrics, im not a musician), inspired by LP's style.

    Any comments will be appriciated.

    'Closing The Door' @ DeviantART: http://www.deviantart.com/view/8689405/

    Thanks in advance.
     
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    ChooseYourPoison

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    Good job. ;)
     
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    chaosblade

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    Hey, thanks. I appriciate comments, even bad ones ;)
     
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    x__f0rg0tten

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    that's totally awesome
     
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    Madi

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    That's really good!
     
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    b0B_th3_Bl0b

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    Wow!! :eek: That's an awesome song!
     
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    Calenia

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    Wow, I like this one. Especially the end ,the final verse is awesome. The "closing door" is a really nice metaphor. Great job.
     
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    chaosblade

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    Thanks again guys, nice to hear more comments :)
     
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    minuteforce

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    Well, for a first song, it's quite good! I'm new to the writing scene as well, but I have to say that without a beat, the lyrics don't seem to fit (in terms of rhyme; the first part, for instance, has five lines). The words are good!
     
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    chaosblade

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    Thanks for the comment, ill try taking that into considartion when i write next time ;)
     
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    Razan

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    Exactly so real. Different I love it (w00t)
     
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    LigerZeroShneider

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    It's good, but you could try to read it and fix a few words here and there, so that it rolls of your tongue. Try singing it a little bit. Oh and you want to make sure that the next verse, feeds from the verse before it.
     
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    x3r09

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    i really like this song! it's really good!
     

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