Stumbled upon this site while looking for some LP wallpapers. Site looks great, i intend to hang around Anyway for my first post ill bring you a song i wrote some time ago (only lyrics, im not a musician), inspired by LP's style. Any comments will be appriciated. 'Closing The Door' @ DeviantART: http://www.deviantart.com/view/8689405/ Thanks in advance.
Wow, I like this one. Especially the end ,the final verse is awesome. The "closing door" is a really nice metaphor. Great job.
Well, for a first song, it's quite good! I'm new to the writing scene as well, but I have to say that without a beat, the lyrics don't seem to fit (in terms of rhyme; the first part, for instance, has five lines). The words are good!
It's good, but you could try to read it and fix a few words here and there, so that it rolls of your tongue. Try singing it a little bit. Oh and you want to make sure that the next verse, feeds from the verse before it.