Shadow

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    raynestar_17

    raynestar_17 Well-Known Member

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    I am the face you see when you close your eyes....
    I am the secret you cannot control....
    I am the whisper that taints your soul....
    I am the scream you can't block out....
    I am the one who's haunting you....

    Do you wish I was dead?

    I am the cry that hums in your throat....
    I am the shadow that follows your step....
    I am the wish that you left unspoken....
    I am the promise you had bitterly broken....
    I am the dark in the pit of your heart....

    I am the grave you left open....
    I am the lie you kept deeply hidden....
    I am the shadow that will not sleep....

    And you're too weak to face me.
     
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    Razan

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    :mellow: ....makes me think.
    I usually don't like repitition but it works wonderfully here!
    So dark, shallow and hollow. Me Likie :D
     
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    Faye

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    its a pretty good...umm...whatever it is

    but that line reminds me of the soung carousel, where they say"I'm too weak to face me" before the chorus oO XD
     
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    LP_Freak_2735

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    Same here. Nice work, keep it up.
     
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    sickcycle

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    very nice, i love short, poweriful, dark poems, and this is a all of those!
     
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    raynestar_17

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    Thank you very much! I was in a dark mood at the time...
     
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    Luke

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    Nice gothic feel to it :)
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    that's some good poetry.
     

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