I dunno if the title for the poem is right,but I just felt like keeping this name just after I wrote the poem,anyways please comment on this. Foolish Thoughts It sounds so dumb that I have become numb for I can't feel any pain nor any pleasure that's why I feel I've lost myself forever There was no time in my life when I didn't expect any pleasure but God gave me pain and suffering to show me what the opposite of them was When in deep and hopeless trouble I always thought God would help me out but every time I forgot the ultimate truth that God helps those who help themselves But I still don't think that I have indeed learnt a lesson 'cause the book from which I'm reading the lesson is a book with blank pages the author of which is me
In my humble opinion, this isn't as good as your other poems, but that doesn't mean I don't like it. I don't really agree with the title, cuz you are trying to express something more powerful. I believe you have the idea; you know what you want to say, but you just seem to have a little bit of trouble findind the right words. Hey, which is ok, as I've said before, you know words can't really express entirely what's found deep inside of us. I liked it, but I believe you could fix it and have a very good piece of work. Keep on writing!!!
i have to agree not your best, but i do absolutely love this verse It is so awsome and it does often seem like this. I recon this could be better. but as TSD said there is a powerful meaning here waiting to be unlocked by your words. Dig deeper. Think less and write with you heart not your head. And i believe you can have a truely absolutely awsome poem.
Well I feel everybody has a problem with my thinking :angry: ,cause think b4 u think got some reactions as if I think 24/7 about such stuff,and is that the reason people feel that I think too much than required?,maybe,but yeah as you both have told I also feel that this can be a better poem,but then "if every poem is good,so which one is good?"(again a thought written by me,who cares for your thoughts idiot :angry: :whistle: ),anyways about the title I feel that though its not perfectly suitable for this poem,but still somehow this came to me,so I guess I will keep this topic until my mind suggests me a new one,anyways thanx for all the honest comments,thank you all.