Shut Up

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    Linja

    Linja Good. Be magnanimous. Über Member

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    Shut up
    I know what you're thinking when you look at me
    Like that
    Shut up
    I know what you're saying when you talk to me
    Like that

    Why do you not understand
    I offer you the chance to see
    I try as hard as I possibly can
    You take the opportunity to scream at me

    I try to make myself
    Your perfect ideal
    But you don't understand
    So I'm breaking the deal

    With the devil, I know
    That you don't really care
    Like with your soul, I know
    That it isn't really there

    You say that I'm running
    From the responsibilities I hate
    But I'm not running, I'm hiding
    Till it's finally too late

    I'm gonna hide till you're done looking
    I'm gonna cry till no more tears
    I'm gonna run till you're done searching
    I'm gonna scream till no more fears

    Deny me what I need
    When I know that I deserve it
    Give me freedom, time to breathe
    Maybe I'll finally understand it

    You watch me with eyes of steel
    Hear me with ears of stone
    Hold me with arms of iron
    That will never let me go

    I'm trapped inside a broken home
    Doors locked and windows barred
    My body flawless, beautiful
    My soul, withered and scarred

    I'm gonna hide till you're done looking
    I'm gonna cry till no more tears
    I'm gonna run till you're done searching
    I'm gonna scream till no more fears


    ~R&R~
    I need a new title for this song, can someone help me? -looks hopeful-
     
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    Phantasm

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    Nice, reminds me of For You by Staind and LP's Numb :)

    For the song title, I don't know...right now I can't think of anything, sorry. But still, good stuff :D
     
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    fallenangel

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    mmm... i like this. i can feel your frustration. as for the title, don't know.

    think about the general feeling your expressing in the poem and take the title from there.
     
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    sim1

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    How about 'Trapped'
     
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    Razan

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    ... :mellow: *stares in awe while trying to think of a tune*
    It's my favorite yet, reminds me alot my pathetic excuse for a mother.
    My favorite:
    So.Fucking.True
     
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    Linja

    Linja Good. Be magnanimous. Über Member

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    Thanks you guys, for now I'll leave it as shut up. Trapped is an option, however.
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    Nice and i also think one of your best yet. I can feel the pain and frustration as if it was my own. Easy to relate to as well. Great work. It does feel a bit like run away, yet totaly different (don't ask me how this is possible). Shut up is an ok title, though i do not really feel it somes u your poem, as the shut up line is more focused on pure anger while the others seem to be focussed around a mix of anger, frustration and confusion. as for my own title. ummm "running from your pain"
     
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    ahamLP

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    Cool,I dunno what to comment since everybody has said what I wanted to,I could relate to the poem,and about the title Shut Up is good,but I have a poem title for one of my own poems which suits this poem,its 'Shut Up and Speak Up'.lol I dunno if u like it,but I felt the title suits it,anyways keep it up,this surely is your best till date,great.
     

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