The room is dark, a single candle burning bright Lying together to watch our shadows in the glowing light As the flame flickers, I watch the burning sight As I hear you softly say, "just you and I tonight". Feeling your warm breath breathing down my neck You wrap your strong arms around me tightly I lean back into you and close my eyes Remembering the first time we touched Smiling as the memory is still fresh in my mind When we embrace, time stands still haulting seconds for an eternity So much going through my mind as we're both frozen in time Wanting this feeling to last forever As we lay, you softly whisper in my ear words that bring my eyes to tear I linger on every word that you say Knowing no one else can make me feel this way As you brush my hair aside you kiss the tears from eyes You lean over to blow out the candlelight I smile...just you and I tonight. Comments?
Really nice for your first poem . There were some issues with the flow blending from stanza to stanza but it wasn't enough to keep me from giving you a 10/10. Good work!
It makes me just wanna grab my ex again. It's really romantic! Did you write it for someone? :chemist: Keep it up.
this was very beautiful it's nice to see some poems that are about happy things instead of sad things. well done, this is a lovey poem!
I wrote this about my boyfriend, John. I love him so much. This poem actually happened in real life many times. I am glad you guys like it. Thanks. It means a lot because I really poured out my heart into this.
wow. i like it. well done for writing somehting positive and romantic without making it cliched and cheesy.