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    bleeding rose

    bleeding rose Well-Known Member

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    Torn apart
    Demon’s heart
    Living still
    Took a pill
    End this pain
    End it all
    Let me fall
    Into a silent sleep
    Where all my sufferings must meet
    I felt used
    More than abused
    I was opened
    Unwillingly
    This is my ending
    My happy ending

    R&R PLEASE :D
    hope you liked it
     
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    fallenangel

    fallenangel Well-Known Member

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    i acually really like this!

    it's simple but it flows really well!

    well done! ;)
     
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    bleeding rose

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    I didn't have much time to do it that's why its so simple and short
    But thanks :p ^_^ :teehee:
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    I must agree, for something so simple i'm just like "WOW". I'm not sure what makes this poem so appealing but i really, really like it. The flow is great and the way it rhymes, it's all just fantastic. Great work. B)
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Short and good. :thumbsup:
     
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    Glue

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    Not bad. Keep it up. :D
     
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    bleeding rose

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    Thank you so much :blush:
     
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    Linja

    Linja Good. Be magnanimous. Über Member

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    This is a really good poem, short and to the point.
     
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