Okay, I used a slightly edited version of the opening verse of this in another song a while ago as the bridge but I've decided to put it in this song instead. So sue me... "Death Is Probably More Beautiful Than Life" As I stand here on the, edge of this cliff I'm, Staring out into the sea, looking for something, But there's nothing but the swell; the emptiness, The blue that reminds me of your lies, I mean your eyes. The birds mime out their overdue welcomes, As the crickets say "goodbye," 'The Beautiful Mistake' I think so, but don't know why, Their music is so cool in my ear, And every word reminds me of you my dear, Oh no... Death is probably more beautiful than life, Death is probably more beautiful than life, Death is probably more beautiful than life. As I'm writing these words, on the edge of my bed, I'm thinking of you, and how emotionless you are, And there's nothing but the notes, coming from my guitar, To remind me of the famous last words you fed me. The birds mime out their overdue welcomes, As the crickets say "goodbye," 'The Beautiful Mistake' I think so, but don't know why, Their music is so cool in my ear, And every word reminds me of you my dear, Oh no... Death is probably more beautiful than life, Death is probably more beautiful than life, Death is probably more beautiful than life. And there's so much more to live for since she ran away, I can't believe that I tried to make her stay, And there's so much more to live for since she ran away, I can't believe that I tried to make her stay. The birds mime out their overdue welcomes, As the crickets say "goodbye," 'The Beautiful Mistake' I think so, but don't know why, Their music is so cool in my ear, And every word reminds me of you my dear, Oh no... Death is probably more beautiful than life, Death is probably more beautiful than life, Death is probably more beautiful than life.
Dave your writing has been taken to the next level with this piece.If you were writing something like this for school or somthing I'd say an A* wouldn't be enough.This is also one of the best pieces of writing I've seen on the LPA on my time here and what I will say is that if both our bands become big...we need a collab cos I'd love to see some of the finished stuff your band comes up with. In terms of the imagry within the writing itself the phrase Death is probably more beautiful than life is something I can realte to right now with all this shit going on in my life right now and The birds mime out their overdue welcomes is awesome aswell. Fucking supreme work here,very well done,I want to see more work of this standard by you.You gotta think I must love it cos its not often that I write 3 paragraphs of writing commenting on someones writing
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