Tonight

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    Luke

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    Tonight, someone is out on the streets
    People throw copper coins at their feet
    They just wanna be acknowledged as more than a bum
    They just wanna finish their lives where they had begun

    Tonight, a teenage girl has been used
    She runs home, only to be abused
    She just wants some respect from the people around her
    She just wants the happiness that she deserves

    Tonight, a foolish boy has taken cocaine
    He doesn’t know how much but he’s in all kinds of strain
    He tries to phone for help but this strain's made him weak
    A voice answers but no, he's too weak to speak

    Tonight, someone’s writing a long note
    Explaining’ just why they slit their own throat
    How they were picked on a bullied til their death
    He writes, “I love you mum” as he takes his last breath

    Tonight, someone’s said I’ve had enough
    And they’ve taken back all of their love
    If only they had it in the first place
    They wouldn’t have huge scars on their face

    In the morning...who knows?
    A hangover of the night's shadows
    The morning sun seems to glow
    Is there hope?...who knows?
     
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    Terry

    Terry Yeah, but I wish you were my shadow. LPA Super Member

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    This is awesome. Fantastic. Great. Just... beautiful.



    I love poems with repeated patterns.
     
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    Ether

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    This is really good, reminds me of right now. Great imagery!
     
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    Luke

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    Thanks for the comments :)
     
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    Good work :)
     
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    Luke

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    Thanks Dave :)
     
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    Linja

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    I adore this. Muchos cookies.
     
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    Luke

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    Yay more cookies :D
     

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