One piece (of you): Aren't you happy? You have everything there is and a whole lot more Not even my love seems to touch your frozen core Won't you please show me what's beneath your bleeding facade Your exterior strengthened by the pain and broken promises inside I want a piece, a piece of what you claim you are I want a piece, a piece of your reopened scars I want a piece, just a piece of what's brought you so far I'm so frustrated... I see what you posess surpasses all I could ever reach I'm crushed by the fact that not even affection could make you breach Now it's my turn to shut you out of my heart as you've done before Knowing that even when not shown towards the outside my heart will stay sore I want a piece, a piece of what you claim you are I want a piece, a piece of your reopened scars I want a piece, just a piece of what's brought you so far It's over, I'm giving up... Every single step closer to you takes me further away from me And I think the time has finally come for me to see that we aren't meant to be Each time I yell you're screaming back to prove the strength you say you have I won't go on like this anymore and it's your fault I fear my pulse is running flat I've become that piece, that piece of what you claim you are I've become that piece, that piece of your reopened scars I've become that piece, that piece of what's kept you where you are And I want myself back but I've sunken too far Mhh...hope you guyz like it?...if not...hoo givz?...(I do )
I like it. Some of line lines seemed a little awkward, but IO love the "courses" and the progression. Great job.