a rap i made up

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    [chali]

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    hey, i made this rap up recently:

    your telling me that i cannot rhyme
    have you heard my lyrics?
    they are not about crime
    looks like to me your emceeing in the rain
    have you heard your lines
    they sound f ucking lame
    oh what a shame
    you just want the fame!
    here i am emceeing in the sun
    with my fans around me
    boy they're having fun
    but look at you
    you have no where to run
    cos this girl right here
    is getting you done
    have you heard your rhymes
    they sound bloody crap
    your thinking of one
    but in your in trap
    all cos you just
    cannot rap!
    the clock is ticking
    try to counter act me
    oh wait you can't
    so start rhyming practically
    actively
    tacitly
    but your way too slow
    being up against me
    boy i made i you blow
     
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    [chali]

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    and another one:

    all you people trying to put s hit on me
    i am gonna beat you guys lyrically
    to sex, drugs, rock n roll
    to speed, weed and birth control
    people these days call that rap
    to me i just call it total crap
    they are loads of things you can rap about
    like politics, disease and your shout
    now that's what you call an intellegent rap
    even 50 cent can't even draw a map
    cos all he raps bout the same old same
    we know he's dumb
    he can't write his own name
    there are loads of intellegent rappers out there
    who dedicate thier lives everyday of the year
    the rhymes they come up with
    are just so sophisticated
    but 50 cent childish and manipulated
    the intellgent and the dumb battling in freestyle
    come on intellegent
    you'll drown them in the nile
    this kinda of bullshit will never stop
    and once you start them
    they'll never drop
    you'll see them in magazines
    from the shop
    with gangsta rap and someone dying
    they won't take the blame
    they are f ucking lying
    with families mourning
    laying thier crying
    the rappers in the gang
    with thier f ucked up slang
    and BANG someone is shot
    they don't care they are just smoking pot
    cos the s hit they write
    they think it's god damn cool
    i don't think so
    they are f uckingfools
    people who say they call this rap
    oh boy oh boy they need a slap
    will this nonsene ever end
    of course it won't it's a f ucking a trend
    people say that white boys can't rap
    look at shinoda and eminem
    at least they don't talk about condems
    they rap about things that are so apolitical
    they think carefully with thier lines
    they are so analytical
    but look at the dumbs ones
    just so uncritical
    I don't care what colour you are
    or a famous movie star
    my message hear today
    I don't care if your gay
    not matter what your race
    everyone can rap
    up or down
    at thier own pace
    but the ones I dissed
    are a total disgrace!
     
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    [chali]

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    another one:

    you and me are battling in this arena
    the #### you come up with
    they're worse than christina
    to britney, jessica and mandy moore
    thier lyrics are just nothing but whore
    so quit thinking like a bloody twelve year old
    and start emceeing properly
    like a pot of gold
    but being up against me
    your already frozen cold
    dissing me as i unfold
    it would be a bad advice.
    i'm hitting at you
    cos my lines are precise
    your staring me
    your as cold as ice
    for goodness sake
    i'm battling with you
    i just want you to break
    with your neck falling off
    feeling pain and ache
    the #### i am giving
    you just cannot take
    you think you can fly like a butterfly
    and sting like bee,
    i mean come on
    you can't even emcee
    cos i can to a tolerable degree!
     
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    MentalMel911

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    I happen to like Jessica Simpson :(


    Besides that, GREAT RAPS!!!! B)
     
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    [chali]

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    another rap:

    so you think it's cool
    to smoke fags and weed
    sticking needles in your arm
    as they start bleed
    you will get high
    oh yes indeed
    do you realise your health is at risk
    your lungs will be damaged
    like a broken floppy disk
    the doctor is saying
    you may have cancer
    you feel angry
    your demanding for an answer
    then he says yes
    you won't be celebrating with your exotic dancer
    why do people do this ####
    they are nothing but dumb
    they have no ####### whit
    then there are people who are alcoholic
    they rap about these things
    they think it's symbolic
    people getting drunk day in day out
    they can't break the habit
    they just can't live without
    the bliming thing kills brain cells
    your stuck on question
    your mind doesn't ring bells
    can't you see
    the stuff is killing you
    it's worse than blink 182
    so take my advice
    just bloody stop
    before you drink drive
    and get caught by the cops
    for killing a human being
    their loved ones
    seeing the pain they are feeling
    the innocent main is dead
    cos of your drink driving
     
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    Alacrity

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    i like how you incorperate certain elements into your raps. you come up and write about things that concern you instead of the same old same every other rapper writes about. Your very creative and i like your style. good raps.
     
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    [chali]

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    thank you :)
     
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    [chali]

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    i wrote more:

    a-b-c-d-e-f-g
    continue the alphabet
    and try to emcee
    with your dim witted lines
    and your illiterate rhymes
    going on and on about gun crime
    rapping about this
    shows me your uneducated
    collaborating with hip hop
    you should be segregated
    so let me teach you some new terminology
    genetic, aesthetic, telekinetic psychology
    listening to these words
    your going crazy in a car crash
    as your mind is damaged
    these words sound like trash
    as i battle with you
    i sound intellectual
    The therapy I gave you
    was just ineffectual
    so as I grab your lines
    and cut it's throat
    drown them into your hands
    like a sinking boat
    using the water as ink
    as i write my rap note
    writing in red water
    I am the slaughter
    battling you in freestyle
    is defiantly worthwhile
    cos after all my lines are versatile
    we know when you rap
    you sound bloody dumb
    cos all you can say is "your..mum"
    thinking in your brain as you bloody climb
    error error
    command processing overhead time
    gives me a sign
    you just cannot rhyme
    as i rise in this hip hop division
    wanna be part of it?
    you need my supervision
    battling with me was pretty intense
    next time i do it
    I'll destroy your
    biological warfare defence
    so don't rap about
    everyone "in da club"
    we all know 50 cent is a ####### snub
    so you think your an emcee
    oh god never
    your here with me now
    you won't last forever

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    as i rise out of this towering inferno
    true emcees not rapping about porno
    cos the ones who collaborate into this section
    spreading it like a disease
    worse than an ear infection
    writing rhymes as they think it's witty
    i don't think so, they sound so shitty
    hearing thier raps
    they have no originality
    look at d12
    such a psychopathic personality
    as they always diss homosexuality
    and problems with mentallity
    all these dumb rappers do is diss diss diss
    them joining the true emcee clan
    i'll drown them in an oceanic abyss
    so you wanna be an emcee
    you gotta be level headed
    battling with pros you're already shredded
    ranking yourself in the emcee society
    the ameutur, the professional, the expert
    there is a variety
    it's not easy to think of good rhymes and lines
    the pro emcees are dressed to the nines
     
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    Steph

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    OOOH! (w00t) I love it !!!!
     
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    [chali]

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    my latest one -->


    as i rise out of this towering inferno
    true emcees not rapping about porno
    cos when you collaborate into this section
    spreading it like a disease
    worse than an ear infection
    writing rhymes as you think it's so witty
    i don't think so, they sound so shitty
    hearing your raps
    you have no originality
    look at you
    such a psychopathic personality
    as they always diss homosexuality
    and problems with mentallity
    all you dumb rappers do is diss diss diss
    you joining the true emcee clan
    i'll drown you in an oceanic abyss
    so you wanna be an emcee
    you gotta be level headed
    battling with me you're already shredded
    ranking yourself in the emcee society
    the ameutur, the professional, the expert
    there is a variety
    it's not easy to think of good rhymes and lines
    the pro emcees are dressed to the nines
    metaphors, similies and personifcations
    including this in rap
    is a good combination
    your rapping velocity is too slow
    speed it up, you need the acceleration
    it takes a long time to get to my posiition
    thinking of healthy lines
    that are in a good condition
    cos when your battling with a girl like me
    I will fire a bomb
    and you'll be nothing but debris
    now your suffering with traumatic stress
    look at you, your nothing but a mess
    cos i'm hitting on you
    with 100% success
    as i drown my lines in your head
    cutting your nerves
    your're already dead!
     
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    [chali]

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    my latest so far -->


    this is how it'll begin
    smacking my lyrics right up to your chin
    they'll be so bad
    you'll be blown to berlin
    as go from counsel right up to the crown
    your status in rap
    will be demoted a step down
    feeling so dreadful
    your turning yellowish brown
    grabbing your lines as i make them injure
    shredding with a samurai sword
    i am the ninja
    as i battle with u there will be no escape
    as i say these rhymes
    i generate no hate
    as they rise to the top they'll be so bait
    cos i've smashed you already on line 8
    u wanna continue this battle
    make your decision
    i'll cut you badly with a lyrical incision
    as you drop dead down
    into my territorial division
    crashing my lines in to your brain
    going to down to the bottom
    destroying cerebral vein
    feeling atrocious pain
    as i have left ferocious stain
    the damage i did is making you psychotic
    getting so crazy
    taking the daily antibiotic
    cos you've lost your talent to be an emcee
    the engine in your brain has no ignition key
    your running away in a car chase
    going far far away
    as i smashed you down to intergalactic space
    now your lyrics and lines have no pace
    cos i've thrashed badly in this rat race
     
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    LinkinTheory

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    That sounds pretty good. Took me awhile to read em all, but it was worth it. Averaging out the scores, (8/10).
     
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    [chali]

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    thanks:) here's a freestyle i did:

    your battling with me now
    what your gonna do
    i'll squash you with a fat lady and a fat man to
    hearing your lines as I give an analytical review
    10 seconds late they are already overdue
    as time fly by's
    in each hour of right asecension
    your so #### in rap
    you crash into a different dimension
    as yor brain gets smaller
    you have no intellectual capacity
    you had no audacity
    to question my rap decision
    i'm battling with you right now
    i am a phase of cell division
    blinding you with my lyrics
    in a ghastly envision
    as you drown down in a monsoon
    i annihilate you with a lyricall typhoon
    5 to 11 your dead twelve noon
    i am point of accumulation
    your stuck sick consitpation
    stil in isolation
    i will poison your lines
    in a secret assasination
    right here right now
    in rap communication
     
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    LinkinTheory

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    You vocabulary is flexible and very well-enriched. But can you deal with this?

    A lyrical establishment,
    On the edge of vocal heaven
    On cloud nine,
    Edge of the line
    Between you sucky rappers
    And the gods of lyrical onslaught
    What we know can't be taught
    To idjits like you
    Who can only rap about girls they
    Will never screw.
    Pimpin'?
    Spend your time rappin
    Cause I'm rippin'
    Your rhymes
    And tearing your lines.

    Okay, that sucked. ;) :lol: B)
     
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    [chali]

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    it's ok actually...at least your not like some real #### rappers like ja rule!

    my latest one -->

    as i play god in this rap battle
    using my powers to smash you down to seattle
    everyone knows i am a master in theology
    i created humans in biology
    cos i will poison your lines badly
    with my knowledge in toxicology
    as the poison goes down right to your throat
    fizzing in your bronchi
    making you choke
    going to the blood to brain
    giving you a major stroke
    cos now you've lost your emcee profession
    your mind is so damaged your suffering
    from psychotic depression
    cos from this rap session
    your talent i must question
    cos i am winning this
    war of the rap succession
    in my rhyme mind you will find
    weapons of mass destruction
    as i become a threat to you
    as your lines will malfunction
    destroying your rhyme main CPU
    spread your rhyming database debris
    all over katmandu
    5 seconds ago you were the rap terminator
    anything you can do, i can do better
    cos i am the exterminator
     
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    [chali]

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    another:

    yo yo yo, i'm a wicked asian emcee
    thinking of clever lines as far as the eye can see
    bad ass this time
    oh yes indeed
    your firing rhyme bombs right at me
    i will capture you
    and you'll be my detainee
    locking you up in a tight lock cell
    throwing away the key
    by my military personnel
    ranking high in my rap officer position
    thinking clever lines
    knowing every dictionary definition
    and in this rap reality
    there is not rhyme abnormality
    as you think of ones that are without formality
    wow your wearing some nice bling bling
    24 carrot gold crown and bracelets
    you look like a king
    saying this informal #### is bent and twisted
    it doesn't make your lyrics look cool and tight fisted
    cos when i am banging my lines on you
    your begging for mercy, you're wishing i never existed
    ding ding ding is that bell
    i am now the devil
    in this scorching hell hole
    as i take your rap body and soul
    you just have no self control
     
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    LornVourkolakas

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    Yo man. I love your rap. Keep up the good work man. *inserts jealousy here* :)
     
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    [chali]

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    thanks :D

    here's a freestyle:

    calling yourself an emcee your such a minor
    tears flooding in your eyes
    wearing some cheap ass eyeliner
    demolishing your lines with mass torture
    intense as an inferno boy this is a scorcher
    looking left to right
    getting afraid of my silhouette
    getting so paranoid
    smoking the marijuana cigarette
    high lyrical adrenaline
    making you sweat
    can you take in my ####
    without becoming upset
    i fire rhyme bombs
    sing song
    my lyrics are as sick as king kong
    stuck at the bottom
    it's my lines you just tripped on
    juvenile delinquent minds
    combined with rhymes
    that are a disgrace to mankind
    blowing the same old same
    in every rap breeze
    going to generation to generation
    like an inherited disease
    producing these lines is just a publicity stunt
    when i snap it
    your mind will just go blunt
    so here i go again
    with my rap campaign
    destroying the lines in your brain
    cos they are f ucking insane
     
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    [chali]

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    my latest:

    using my rap powers to cause a nuclear disaster
    neutronic chain reaction so i can enable this line faster
    collaborating with physics i am a master
    as my rap mind is so powerful
    i'm a dangerous spell castor
    unique metaphorical lines that are notorious
    telling the whole world as i remain high and glorious
    smashing you, crashing you with lines, as you become furious
    sorry love, i've won i remain victorious
    pleasing every emcee as i am called the perfectionist
    hearing your lines as you remain a rejectionist
    chanting lines is my daily meditation
    thinking of metaphors similes and personifications
    of course it's true rap, it's a dedication
    murdering people's mind as your a dictator
    hater, traitor
    rapping about weapons of mass destruction
    as they found on your rap equator
    giving you a special name
    i'll call you saddam hussain
    cos your lines are pure ####
    they are so-damn-insane
    as my rhymes stream perpetually from the sun
    producing deadly radiation as you've become so numb
    gamma rays, x-rays, ultraviolet, infrared
    destroying your brain cells as you drop dead
    skin peeling off as it begins to crumble
    boy oh boy this is good
    lets get ready to rumble
     
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    lpfan891

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    thats awsome dude keep it up =)
     

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