Gray Road

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    Omar A

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    Gray road

    Chorus:
    Will I be successful
    Or will I lose control
    Will I hold together
    Or will I fall in the darkest hole

    Verse 1:
    every night I sit in my room in the dark
    And I would go on my knees and ask god
    To guide me throw the right track
    Cuz in this world I’m so lost
    I don’t know where I’m going to end up
    If I follow this gray road

    Chorus:
    Will I be successful
    Or will I lose control
    Will I hold together
    Or will I fall in the darkest hole

    Verse 2:
    Every night I lock myself in my room
    And I would cry and cry for being alone
    Just begging god to take my soul
    Cuz in this world I’m losing control
    I don’t know if I’ll ever be told
    The truth of this gray road

    Chorus:
    Will I be successful
    Or will I lose control
    Will I hold together
    Or will I fall in the darkest hole
     
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    Omar A

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    any comments........ :(
     
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    Andrea

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    That was really good. I loved it. Excellent work. :)
     
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    I like it ^_^
     
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    Casy

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    Very good, but a bit short...
    I love the verse "Or will I fall in the darkest hole" !
    And a bit depresive by the way....
     
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    Omar A

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    thanks guys :)
     
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    John.

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    the Chorus is very catchy, the Verses are ok, but the song is overall way too short, but good job on the chorus, btw.
     
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    Omar A

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    Thanks

    I kinda wanted it to be short, I don't know why though :wth:
     
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    John.

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    you should try to revise it and make it a little longer and you'll have a beautiful song :)
     
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    Omar A

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    I will try
     

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