.:Come Back To Me:.

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    Tim2

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    Please read and respond to 'Come Back To Me', I'd greatly appreciate it. Thanks in advance.


    .:Come Back To Me:.

    Another sleepless night
    Without you here
    The night's in full bloom
    And the clock flashes one
    But wide awake
    I'm tossing over in bed
    Tugging at my covers
    Restless here tonight
    And it's all the same hue
    Throughout my eyes

    Remember when we held hands
    Down by the shimmering pond?
    Remember when i held you close
    Under the weeping willows?
    I miss those times
    I miss your shoulder here
    Please come back
    Come back to me

    The static from the sky
    Frequently lighting my room
    To reveal my eyes wide
    And the clock flashes three
    I'm more alert than before
    And still can't sleep
    My covers in heaps
    Scattered across the floor
    And it's the same numbing
    All over my body

    Remember when we first kissed
    Out for all to see?
    Remember when we first spoke
    The glisten in both our eyes?
    I miss those times
    I miss your warmth here
    Please come back
    Come back to me

    Remember when we held hands
    Out for all to see?
    Remember when we first spoke
    Under the weeping willows?
    I miss those times
    I miss your warm shoulder here
    Please come back
    Come back to me

    Hand in hand off into the daylight...
     
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    Jamie

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    Nice work!
     
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    Metamorphosiss

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    Its great! ;)
     
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    Tim2

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    Thank You, both. :)

    If anyone has anything to add I'd love to hear.
     
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    Andrea

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    You're a talented writer, Tim. There is a lot of talented writers on here. You and everyone else should be proud of yourselves. Great job! :)
     
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    crazy_dips:-)

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    Really amazing poem.. and it really brings up the emotions of longing and sadness... well written.. :)
     
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    Tim2

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    Aww, thank you so much. :D That means alot to me.

    And thank you as well, crazy dips, especially for using your first post to respond to my work. Thank You.

    :)
     
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    Casy

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    Yes,your lyrics are full of strong emotions...very good job!!
     
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    _PianoPaPercut_

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    hehe.. i second her! its really a good poem.. its so sad too.. *sniff* good work...^^
     

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