They're both really roughly done and were single takes for the most part (which is why some of the lyrics differ slightly from what's shown below). But please have a listen and see what you think, despite the songs being nowhere near finished. Cheers. Oh, and please forgive me for the parts of the vocals that go wildly out of tune XD The songs can be found on Soundcloud here: http://soundcloud.com/silence-your-critics/recreation-not-procreation and http://soundcloud.com/silence-your-critics/unprotected And the lyrics are below. Recreation. Not Procreation. The last words she said to me were "okay thank you" I checked; I didn't want to misquote incase she knew, That our time together meant nothing to me, It might sound crazy, but 9 months is a long time to lie. If my friends knew what I put her through, They'd lose respect for me, And if my friends knew all the things we used to do, They'd lose respect for her too. One day you'll stop making these mistakes, And learn that trusting me is the biggest one you've made. The last words I said to her were "it wasn't a revenge thing at all, And I don't want you to show off to me, So I guess that means I'm saying don't waste your time." Don't waste your time on me. If my friends knew what I put her through, They'd lose respect for me, And if my friends knew all the things we used to do, They'd lose respect for her too. Pool tables are for playing pool, They're in no way comparable to the bed room. Unprotected This week I've doubled the amount of girls that I've slept with, Though I'm regretting my decision to do it all unprotected, Undoubtably this will all end with the worst type of disease, But at least these girls will finally have something in common with me. I know that I should be ashamed of myself, 'Cause I've been sleeping around, But you brought this on with your spiteful tongue, And I just played along. So for the fourth night straight with my fourth date, I'm committing to laying down, Let's just hope I settle soon, Before I reopen any old wounds. You're not the first girl I've failed to make come, But I'm a selfish man when it's in my hands, And I'm not game for carrying on, If we're getting serious just know I'm in it for fun, Because I've reached my prime just in time, And I'm terrified of falling in love.
Great ideas there, I think the execution wasn't the best, but as you said they are rough demos. I think if you record them, more "professionally" then they'll be awesome. Keep it up (the good songwriting).
Cheers That's what I'm after really, just opinions on if I'm heading the right direction in terms of my writing They will get recorded properly at some point but it's just getting time to sort it all out
Good demos. By the way in my new album, I use different vocal effects in every song, since I'm not confident in my voice. If you feel you are going out of tune try to resing it or add a tinge of autotune to your vocals.