An Ocean's Waves

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    Jesse

    Jesse Out of the abyss. LPA Über VIP

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    An Ocean's Waves

    Subdue --These feelings I hold for you
    Compress -- These demons in my chest
    Exhale -- These memories I'd dispel
    Consume --The petals before they bloom
    Erase -- A heart spent in waves of ocean's days
    Contain --These phantom's in my brain
    Besmear -- This love I hold severe
    Eschew -- The light that's cast its hue
    Just subdue --These feelings I've held for you
     
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    I like the wording, not sure how I feel about the structure.
     
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    Jesse

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    The jarring structure is a metaphor, thus its namesake.
     

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