Anesthetic . - . - . -

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    meteoricgirl_kelly

    meteoricgirl_kelly Well-Known Member

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    i wrote this poem this year when me and my ex were still together and i told him that i didn't feel a connection between us anymore i wanted us to stay together..lines 8-15 are about one day last year at school when he came to school sad and crying. (i don't know what about though)

    Anesthetic . - . - . -

    it seems that everyday
    i'm falling down into a black hole
    and every day that ends without you
    i fall harder than the day before
    and today i fell harder than ever
    you're hurt and mad
    and it makes me sad
    because i wanted to hold you
    tightly in my arms
    so you couldn't be hurt
    i want to take you away
    from everything that makes you angry
    and everything that makes you crazy
    i want to be your shield from the pain
    i never want you to feel this way again
     
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    fallenangel

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    this was pretty good! i see real potential in you to become a really fab writer!

    have you been writing long?
     
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    meteoricgirl_kelly

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    i've been writing for about a year and a half now
     
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    Glue

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    nice work! I like it very much. Guess what, I felt the same way. :D
     

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