i wrote this poem this year when me and my ex were still together and i told him that i didn't feel a connection between us anymore i wanted us to stay together..lines 8-15 are about one day last year at school when he came to school sad and crying. (i don't know what about though) Anesthetic . - . - . - it seems that everyday i'm falling down into a black hole and every day that ends without you i fall harder than the day before and today i fell harder than ever you're hurt and mad and it makes me sad because i wanted to hold you tightly in my arms so you couldn't be hurt i want to take you away from everything that makes you angry and everything that makes you crazy i want to be your shield from the pain i never want you to feel this way again
this was pretty good! i see real potential in you to become a really fab writer! have you been writing long?