Hope seems to fade away When you constantly trip and fall Everything seems out of reach Moving from failiure to failiure Losing your mind for every reason Unstable, diminished and weary Paranoid, susceptible and pessimistic Falling into a state of isolation Defeat, depression and deception Cold and emotionless I stand Driven down by lack of self-esteem I need to break the cycle Once again lost in the unknown Unable to follow a straight line How can I find the path? Please help me break the cycle Fighting a constant hesitation Can’t seem to make the right decisions Less by an infantile lack of judgment Than because of a recurring fear Fear of the fall, fear of drowning In a sea of confusion and misunderstanding Pushed back against your own will Yet pushed back by your own self Defeat, depression and deception Cold and emotionless I stand Driven down by lack of self-esteem I need to break the cycle Once again lost in the unknown Unable to follow a straight line How can I find the path? Please help me break the cycle Defeat, depression and deception Cold and emotionless I became Just can’t stand being driven down anymore Please help me break the cycle
great poem, really powerful. i believe (in my humble opinion) this demonstrates once more how we all seem to depend on someone else to be happy. not always, but can you imagine a world with no sound, no words, no faith, no hope, no emotions...? back to topic.. (lol) well done. keep it up!!
Awsome poem. I could feel the power from this poem. this is a way we all feel. (if im write in what i believe the meaning of the poem to be). That it can feel we have no hope when we are trapped in the same cycle of faliure and loss and we just want to brake free of it. good stuff. KEEP WRITING.
this poem is very detailed in my opinon on emotion and hope, faith ect. one of last to enter the siggy!
Right on! Thanks for the comments people! [/b][/quote] what more could we say...? you're really talented man! keep going
First things first welcome to writers cove(I guess you are a new poet here,as much I have read,this is your first stuff),and about the poem its great,the words used,the way they are used is awesome,and a stuff to which I can relate to very much.great write,hope to see more of your stuff,keep it coming.
this was really good, very detailed and expressing an emotion that many can identify with. keep up the good work and i really look forward to reading more of your stuff!
I used to write a looong time ago, long before you registered . However, I don't write for writing; there are moments when you're feeling like it, and I don't "force" them. Again, thanks!
i like it. but it's just too elaborated..too many adjectives. it just stresses the mind, if i'm not wrong. put in more verbs and nouns instead. you have amazing capacity and you can definitely create a beautiful master piece...you have the potential dude!!! awesome job, otherwise!!!