Well rather than comment individually on each poem...they're all pretty good, if a little depressing. I like the fact that your poems whilst painful, aren't just cliche teenage angst.
Chrysalis, while your writings are actually quite beautiful I hope you're kidding about the suicide remark. It doesn't matter what your problems are or how terrible your life is, there is never ever an adequate reason to kill yourself. There is always a more logical and reasonable path to take then committing suicide. Enough said.
hmm..i dun blame u guys...aight...i thought killing wud help me solve my prob...i wanted 2 find some peace...this isnt working for me...if killing myself aint the solution then wat is.....my parents broke up recently..my mom is on drugs...she cant even help herself..let alone me helping her....the band we had..is now no more...cuz the ma best frnd ( the lead guitarist of the band ) is fighting cancer...and for me...its like a backs 2 the wall job...i cant take it anymore..
So instead of helping people with their problems you'd rather abandon them and take your own life so it's not so hard on you? No offense, but that's horrifically selfish. You need to help them. By helping them, you'll help yourself and you won't be so depressed. That's what I'm doing right now and it works pretty well. Try it.
wow..wat fire...i m pretty sure...FRED DURST wud be proud of this...did u write this outta frustration..or jus felt like writin sth kool??
aight thnx..i jus saw a video named " hold on " by Good Charlotte..pretty amazing...it says every 18 mins sum1 in USA commits suicide...:|
Hey...don't just go saying stuff I never said I'll help anyone...but...I never said that I wouldn't either... ...ah hell...who needs help? PS.:nice lyrics dude?
THNX DUDE !! P.S : no offense dude...but..instead of thoughts whn u put sarcasm over ur mind all u can come up with is dilettante fatuity..
|X| ROSES |X| Slime from a water melon drowns my eyes I wake up from another dream As drowsy as I may seem, I’m still me Still me in my silly dreams I go around in circles I see roses of different colors No 1 speaks I see a white rose It gives me some peace Takes me higher to the sky Keeps me busy Makes me shy I sleep in a quite room Peace in my eyes Peace in my dreams Peace in my shallow creeps Peace in my sleep I go around in circles again I see another rose No 1 speaks I see a yellow rose I see a beautiful garden with our names written on it I wear a yellow suit, you wear a yellow gown We get creeps We see those trees Trees with red leafs We fall o so apart Forever I crippled in your heart Magic in our eyes Magic in our dreams Magic in our shallow creep Magic in our sleep Round and round we go again and again We fall down to the ground Our hands get ripped apart I see the last rose No 1 speaks It’s a black rose It signifies our death Our dreams come to a stop Our nightmares take over our yellow soul I become your sinner You become my saint We scrub the yellow grasses together I see your yellow eyes, I see it go black We take our clothes off Stone ourselves with one last wish Hand in hand until the end We see roses of all kinds Hand in hand until the end We see us in every1 else Hand in hand until the end We tie a knot and hope for it to stay as it is Hand in hand until the end No 1 speaks Us in our eyes Us in our dreams Us in our shallow creeps Us in our sleep
THE SNOW IN HELL Cold in the summer day Cold with you’re teasing hate Wondering down those 2 plate signs beside your house Jumpin’ up and down, waiting for some sign Feelin’ low and broke waiting for your smile Bridges are my only escape Bitches are my only share So jump with me Love the wind that tells us something Love those stupid jokes that make you high All I need is to love you And to feel our soft selves To make love to you And feel our sour selves So here I am, Warm in a winter day Warm with you’re teasing hate Thinking of you all the time Writing hopeless poems just to feel better Thinking of you still, Writing this poem to feel just a little better So sing along with me, Let our voices take away the pain Sing along with me Let our hope take us to the sky Let’s imagine things we’ve never thought of Ill be your bird you’ll be my kangaroo We’ll keep on singin’ until I’ve convinced you So here I am Awkward in this sour day Awkward with your lovin’ hate So sing with me 1 more time Don’t you see? I’m sure now you see People say our love is mortal But something tells me its not So sing along with me Keep up with me Come on girl, dance with me Let this feeling take us away to Neverland Let this feeling take us away to my dream land Let this feeling take us away to your dream land Come on girl, Let this love take us away to heaven P.S : i guess the poem dusnt have anythin 2 do with the TITLE...or does it??..i got a lil carried away...with ma dreams...
A cliff with an endless Bottom a cliff with a endless bottom i say it hard to wake up cuz its 7.30 in the fuckin mornin i say i am supposed to sleep till 2 n dream, cuz dats the only thing i can do i dreamt that im fallin out fallin down down from a cliff with a endless bottom outside in the cold world heartless world full of thugs with guns n drugs i am recluses i am old, cramped with rust a junk a worhtless pile of trash i lie in the grass, a puddle of mud lookin at the sky defenceless n naked, dumb and numb i am slipping here, i am slipping there i am always complainin cuz my life full of problems n pain and as i never can solve them i am fallin out i am fallin down down from a cliff with endless bottom i sit n whine i whine all day long about my life about the fact that why girls dont like me why am i a bag full of shit why am i victim of a faith called love why is there so much pain in my life why are my ways so broken and shattered and y i never can mend them i am fallin out i am fallin down down from a cliff with a endless bottom now i see the reality a vision full of emptiness n sorrow a reality that is sharp n rough the truth which is gonna cut n bruise a possession where i am gonna cry n bleed im gonna fall out im gonna fall down down from a cliff with a endless bottom girls dont like me girls like thugs with money n bikes, ciggartes n pipes, guns n 6 packs not sum babyface loosers,not some innoncent guy sugar i wasted my time before dreamin of livin now i waste my time dreamin of and im fallin out im fallin down down from a cliff with a endless bottom before i got to figure her out my time was already over i came to reality though its gonna hurt n cut came face to face with truth though its gonna brusie n hand out pain i didnt stay blind i dont belive in fairy tales cuz life is not a bed full of roses rather its a pocket full of sharp objects not a paradise made by god its a pathetic piece of mudball where the devil plays his scheme n i figured out i was fallin out i was fallin down down from a cliff with a endless bottom P.s: sorry bout the frustration...i jus had it...i m tired of living..and making love to a memory...
THE END is near... alive in the night seeking light in the corner it all is, a light, lonely suffocation; tied up in the sheets... you're all you can pick, and all you can sleep is down and over... the same dim sane...insane tower love... in a crazy lane...in that lane... walk into its plane fly high...up into the night dont let it die... dont let this die... all's real high... lie on that side take your ride good flight dont fight blow that sign in the candled line dry the pinelast living dime... waste it all... you're high.. high above the wicked sky and this crazy line's gonna drown you tonight!! watch you die suffocating lonely for a lie alone alive this night all aside the fight you shut youself to sleep you aint nothing you can pick you're going down real deep done with the sip...
A black & white stage When being obsessed, I sink the evolution of my trance As I stand in your sight I linger while ogling at your eyes I sink the evolution, when being gripped to the mold I can’t help but panic as I let my trance set out I adorn myself when slithering across the blue For the ending calamity recaps our over blown yarn Of us; the cadence and the light we see in the sky I hang myself down; with stances of being on top I take a wonder ride to the sea, I witness our shadows sink As the ending calamity recaps our over blown yarn And behind this drape, I hide Where no one can see me The stars they shine as I shed my last tear I ride along with the wind; as I think Of us, the cadence and the light we see in the sky I hide, where no one but you can see me As I roll across the floor behind the curtains I see my dreams pet itself into a bending sorrow Where pain and strong endurance minces our memories And how strange it seems, as illusions sink my life I see my thoughts pet itself into a bending sorrow I roll across the floor, where I live in a world of cerebral violence And what if this never ends? And you end up dying So unaided, sometimes dreams are the only cure But if only I wasn’t drowning I’d take you to the blue Never allowing us to depart this life I linger while ogling at your eyes I sink the evolution, when being gripped to the mold I can’t help but panic as I let my trance set out I lay behind this drape hiding With all the stars diminishing We tempt into black and white Where colors hide behind a curtain A curtain that sinks our life; with illusions that sink deep With all the stars diminishing The drape keeps us within dreams; meant for us to see
Tale For The Seasons And as I rot the last promise I make; I wait inside a circle, patiently anticipating Yet nothing is all, and my cure seems to be a descending fall Having nonentity, I wait inside a circle; Where I pick leafs from trees that perish away with the cold ether And I lay gleaming at the sky, waiting and anticipating It’s not an answer I want It’s a solution, to escape this scorching sphere, where I wait To keep my promises and move ahead And as the summer approaches me I see it loom with words it creates And the words; they deny As I wait in the circle, I get creeps from thoughts I see it loom with words it creates I lay gleaming; waiting and anticipating I peer at the silent drizzle that falls from the sky I see it as a solution that shards away the silent space I bend forward; with my foot placed on the ground I try to make a move, not perceiving anything I still try; knowing there’s something else that veils away It gets me nowhere; I lay trapped inside with anticipation Now as I get to autumn, I see the leafs plunge downhill with me Never touching one; I see it drown along with the dreams, We try to keep within; and now as its too late We give up hope, and fate betrays us for feathers that never appear And as I get to the end, I see the circle unwrap itself; showing me the sight But I fail to keep up; Not knowing what this life was ever about, I fail to keep up. And now I realize, as I descend The scent of waiting equals the smell of drying Apprehension I fail to conquer Realizing my fall, I descend; with out denying Never burning away the scars, I remain unsolved and perished Inside the circle of death, I lay; unsolved and uncertain Not knowing what this life was ever about, I fail to keep up.
A Distant light As the last word went out of occasion, I watched the water churn Freeing arms and eyes; I stopped at nothing; pure hearted empathy Forever deeming the maker’s word; I wiped all of my tears As the last word went out of occurrence, I watched the bird’s fly Seemed rather astonishing, As the pure heart turned us into effigies The rise smelled of flora and honey encrusted fireflies And as we gleamed; trust turned our scent to a stop With an awful panic, we watched the water drown away; The pictures we held up to get rid of all sedition And as the waves orbited our eyes to tears, I slowed down the pace, being sympathetic I freed out my arms As they grabbed me, I smiled out our ending times Seemed rather astonishing, As the pure heart turned us into effigies The rise smelled of flora and honey encrusted fireflies And as we gleamed; trust turned our scent to a stop As the spice changed the contour, I woke up to another feet, in peace And I went as sealed up as I could; never estimating; Always remembering, I saw the light through an open door I woke up to another feet, in peace I traveled times and memories; Went as I close as I could I slowed down the pace, being sympathetic I freed out my arms As they grabbed me, I smiled out our ending times As the last word went out of occurrence, I watched the bird’s fly Seemed rather astonishing, As the pure heart turned us into effigies The rise smelled of flora and honey encrusted fireflies And as we gleamed; trust turned our scent to a stop I woke up to another feet, in peace I traveled times and memories; Went as I close as I could
Glitter ASESSED sky Our thoughts are for sure overdriven Flowing like a flash of lights, Inside the sky; through the hours of the unsolved past I see my feet stir; I call hope to assist Knowing tonight will be identical to others Flowing like a flash of glitter-assessed lights I see your eyes move I vanish; hiding behind a blanket Filled with additional tears; my heart Pumps up the beat, I feel the ocean seethe And as the water settles into rest, I appear Never knowing, rather amending the truth And now I wander around the fields; Where our hands depart painted felonies, Seeming to be our only chance, I try To redden the atmosphere, as it hurls into the cleave We wait for our mouths to speak The stars; they shine up the sky Surrounded by thoughts that travel through people’s eyes Ours get trapped, puzzled in disbelief; We whisper into objective substances, That appear as believers to our name Surrounded by thoughts that contradicts with our care for each other We see the wind flow along with the lies I vanish; hiding behind a blanket Filled with additional tears; my heart Pumps up the beat, I feel the ocean seethe And as the water settles into rest, I appear Never knowing, rather amending the truth Inside the sky; through the hours of the unsolved past I see my feet stir; I call for hope to assist Knowing tonight will be identical to others At the bottom of the sea, lays our cadence of truth, Someday we’ll put our hands into it; devoicing the stars We glance at the empty sky Avoiding all the seething oaths We glance at the sky
A plastic sketch Lowering this crystal melted fin The warm air blurs me in my head and in my brim Crossing a field where I stand looking at nothing And the green touches my melted skin I wear out my pendulum where the light stands Lowering my friend’s melted sin Treasures I never found Gold with a mold dread The hope, I never mewed out Dead over the innocent fight Plastic in a plastic mist Scurry when open to the jarred score Holding and sleeping in the edge’s slate Blurry when lying on the dirty grim Plastic over a plastic mist Trust this sketch and lone Holding this stir I bind With the box and the fake I hold this stir and I fly Trusting this sketch and lone All over the crossed stripe I contour the falling dime I sell it for my lifting crawl I contour my falling slime All over the crossed stripe Coning the barred stick I struggle to act I write my last letter I struggle to act Coning this barred stick Riding along my mired road I let my only dream go Screaming and breathing into this last word I ride along with my rising wrath Crazed by my haunting bawl I let my only dream go Riding along my only mired road I hold this stir and I fly Trusting this sketch and lone Blowing this meshed firm I dry out what’s already pale I try to climb into this promise I see the drogue I dry out what’s already yours I see a blessing in a few I dry out what’s already pale Blowing and crowing this broken firm Longing away from the deep blur I blow away this meshed firm I let my only dream go With this pain in my ogle I’ll take this scaled craze I’ll take away my country sense With this ache in my gaze I let my only dream go Treasures I never found Gold with a mold dread The hope, I never mewed out Dead over the innocent fight Blurry when lying on the dirty grim Plastic over a plastic mist Dying when trying to find out Plastic over my dying cry I let this dream go And I let the scrawny one attain I let my only dream go As I let the weak score Plastic over my plastic mist