Desperate

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    LP_Freak_2735

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    I wrote this on April 13 of last year. It's one of my first poems. I found some other old ones but they reallly suck butt so they're staying off the boards. What do you think of this one?

    Desperate

    Desperately looking for an escape
    looking for a way to get out of your games
    To get out of your face
    Needing to get out
    and let go of my doubt
    Screaming inside,
    Let me out let me out.
    Let me leave and be done
    with this horrible game.
    I'm dying inside
    Letting go
    Giving up
    I'm gone.
     
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    CloserToCrawling

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    I actually really like it. I like how it diminishes as the poem comes to a close. :)
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    It really is good.
     
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    Louis

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    Decent. Keep up the good work.
     
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    notneo

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    i like the way uve written it . I like what it means .
     
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    fallenangel

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    yeah, i agree on that! you obviously made a pretty good start to writting cause this being one of your first poems, it pretty damm rocks!

    no wonder your a good writer now!

    can't wait to see some new stuff!
     
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    Tom

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    wow kwl , i liked the poem , keep up the good work.
     

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