Writing: Devotion (Lyrics)

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    RyRy

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    I wrote this poem months ago and finally got around to finalizing it. It's one of my favorite things I've written so far. The style of it was definitely influenced by Trent Reznor's lyrics from The Downward Spiral and Year Zero. I have written the lyrics into a song, but it's really just a rough idea with instrumental recordings from my phone mic. I'd greatly appreciate any feedback, positive or negative!

    <Chorus>
    Sit, pray, kneel, bow, lie, high
    Come around, calm down, turn around and meet your fucking maker


    <Verse 1>
    So once devoted to a God,
    In jealously and in blood
    I walked it straight and easy,
    Straight and easy
    I walked it straight and easy
    Just for him to one day please me
    One day please me
    One day please me?

    Cry your heart into the sky-
    For our lord has come
    Our lord has come
    What lord has come?


    <Chorus>
    Sit, pray, kneel, bow, lie, high
    Come around, calm down, turn around and meet your fucking maker

    Sit, pray, kneel, bow, lie, high
    Come around, calm down, turn around and meet your fucking maker


    <Verse 2>
    I've been watching them forever
    In the churches and the choirs,
    Preaching of a man and his lies

    No one speaks against it
    While the preachers preach amended,
    Endless words of invention
    Timeless worlds of perfection
    Sweetened guilt in reflection
    Of the power and complexion
    Is the making of a Godly devotion


    <Chorus>
    Sit, pray, kneel, bow, lie, high
    Come around, calm down, turn around and meet your fucking maker

    Sit, pray, kneel, bow, lie, high
    Come around, calm down, turn around and meet your fucking maker


    >Bridge<
    I am the Alpha
    I am the King
    I am have become
    Things I didn't want to be

    I built a new world
    And they fucked it up
    I built your new world,
    And you fucked it up
    I built your new world!
    And you fucked it up!
    I built your new world!
    And you fucked it up!

    I am the Alpha
    I am the King
    I am the God,
    Of your dead dreams

    In this devotion
    You pray and kneel
    In this devotion
    I play to steal

    I am the Alpha
    I am the King
    I am the God,
    Of your dead dreams

    In this devotion
    You pray and kneel
    In this devotion
    I play to steal

    I am the alpha
    (Sit, pray, kneel, bow, lie, high)
    I am the King
    (Come around, calm down)
    I have become
    (Turn around and)
    Things I didn't want to be
    (Meet your fucking maker)


    I am the alpha
    (Sit, pray, kneel, bow, lie, high)
    I am the King
    (Come around, calm down)
    I am the God
    (Turn around and)
    Of your dead dreams
    (Meet your fucking maker)
     
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    I really like this :O
    Is it okay for you if one of my singers would sing these lyrics to one of my new tracks?
     
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    Thank you! I'm glad you like it!

    You can use my lyrics as long as you are not selling/distributing the song for money. If you do use them I'll be excited to hear it! :awesome:
     
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    This is hell good dude. Nice work.
     
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    Haha thank you so much! :awesome:
     
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    Meet your fucking maker :rofl: That's a great line!

    ^Probably the best part.
     
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    Thank you! Haha, I'm glad you liked those two parts. Namely the one you quoted, thank you! :)
     

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