Emotional Song

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    Dedicated

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    I just wrote this song off the top of my head whilst playing the guitar to the same few chords over and over. I just played and sang and recorded the results. If you want to listen to the song then message me or something, I'm not sure why you'd want to though... Anyway, if you did happen to want the song and get it off me, this is what you would be singing along to, :lol::

    "Emotional Song"

    Pick up the phone,
    I know you want to,
    I know you need to,
    Talk to me,
    You said you'd like it,
    If you just knew,
    All the stupid little things.

    I can't hear myself,
    So I don't think,
    That this is working out,
    I know you could be,
    Please listen up you,
    I hope that you are,
    So I can hear it too.

    These lyrics,
    Are running through my mouth,
    Right off my tongue,
    And into your ears,
    If that's not working,
    Then it's just not working,
    And you can try now,
    'Cause I've had enough of this.

    I try too much,
    And now you're not even liking my words,
    Or my lips,
    On your mouth,
    On your tongue...

    It's your time to speak,
    And my time to sing,
    And your time to care,
    About every little thing,
    And I don't know what,
    That last line was,
    I don't think it worked though,
    Emotional song...

    Emotional song, for you,
    To cry over, to cry over, to cry over me,
    Now's your turn to speak.
     
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    LP_Freak_2735

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    Wow!!
    I love it, it's amazing. I'd love to hear it as a song!
    Keep up the amazing work.
    --Elaine<3
     
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    Luke

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    You can do alot better Dave...you know that as well as I do.
     
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    Linja

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    Pretty good. I like the first verse. Keep it up.
     
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    Sorry to say, not your best, i couldn't really get into it but it seems to fit more of a song then just a poem, though it doesn't fit your ordinary song structure. So overall it's ok, not fantastic, but as a song to some awsome music, that could be a different story.
     
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    I always like reading your work, this one being no exception. Keep 'em coming.
     
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    Dedicated

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    Yeah. I know. I'm having a real problem getting inspiration recently. Sucks... <_<


    Thanks for the comments everyone :)
     
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    Luke

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    Yeah. I know. I'm having a real problem getting inspiration recently. Sucks... <_< [/b][/quote]
    I know what you mean,there's plenty of insperation around me but I think my anger and unhappiness blocks me from writing it out into a kickass peice of writing.
     
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    Arhaz

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    i loved the second last stanza the most...i bet the whole thing will sound amazing when you sing it. ;)
     
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    Thanks :)
     
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    Keep up the good work man.
     
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    Thankies ^_^
     

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