I made this song based off of getting out of a small town like where I live. It's a little unperfected, but I am going to most likely make adjustments to it. Tell me what you think. V1 Everyday is the same Nothing ever changes I need to escape this place Before I settle my own fate Living here is like living in a nightmare You can run but not get too far Nothing will ever hold me back once I'm set free I'll make everybody see CH I'm getting out of here I'm escaping my own fate Tell me what will it take To make you fucking see V2 I'm drowning myself What way can I escape I'll never see your face Once I decide the day That I pack up my shit and leave Everything here will be left behind in the dust Quicker than how fast this place will leave my head Once I'm done here I'm never gonna come back And that's the day everybody will open up their eyes and see CH Where's the love Where are all the people Nothing resides here It's a quicksand trap And I won't live my life Trapped inside some hole I'll make my escape
I'm sorry to say this but: I thought the wording in the second was rather poor and I honestly have a feeling that it's far from finished. A few parts were okay but other than that... Sorry...don't mean to sound like a dick...
It's ok, but the change of chorus there, ruins any rhythm with the song, my suggestion is to keep writing and you can try to rewrite this song, or what I did with my first few lyrics I ever wrote, I just took bits and pieces and made 4 songs out of 2 so you could try something like that, keep trying, you can only get better if you keep writing. Also read others and pick up on there styles of writing and then form your own unique style.