My minds done with this, So hey, I've got a question, Can I throw it all away? Take back what's mine, So I take my time, Driving humbly down the line, Each cut, closer to the pain, For what's inside awaking, I'm not, I'm not a whore, You've taken everything and, Oh I cannot give anymore. R&R by peter who couldn't get his own account so i will be posting his poems/songs Please reply
i think this is good, better than the last one. but i think it sounds alittle too much like korn. but i think if he keeps at it and writes more for emotions sake and not rhyming's sake, he will get much better. i did the same and i still do. the flow comes with pratice and more important, confidence. great start though!
not bad, not your best, i agree, it felt like a short korned version of from the inside. LOl sorry. but thats how i feel. could be better, keep trying.