I havent posted here in a while even though i've been writing like crazy. This is one of the new ones i wrote, And prolly my favourite from the bunch. <div align=center>I can't trust anyone. I'm slowly losing everyone around me I can feel them edging away They took away my sanity Left me to rot and decay. Im leaving now and i cant stop myself I can't come back, not even for an hour I dont want to leave and i wish i hated this I tried to stand up, But you know i'm a coward. I'm going to take my time Cos Im going into this unknown world Im dont care what will happen You were the one that failed. ------ Chorus ------ I cant trust anyone. ANd i know that no one cares I cant trust anyone And i know that no one cares. ------ Chorus ------ I'm slowly losing everyone around me I can feel them edging away They took away my sanity Left me to rot and decay. Chorus x2</div>
Fairly good, had great structure and none of the rhyming felt forced. This verse is my favourite part of the song. Good job, hope to see you posting more often.
*thumbs up* awesome work, there, dude... *feels great need for collaboration once more* lol..sometime perhaps