I HATE you. (cough. Title undecided.)

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    Muri

    Muri It never ends.

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    Anyway,it's really not as good as my other poems or something... but I really need to spill this,since I'm awfully depressed right now.

    Why can't you see,
    who I really am,
    instead of yelling 'I hate you' in my face?
    I'm sick of this image of me,
    who you created,
    you have to understand,
    that you can't make me over.

    And the real problems what I got,
    just make you angrier with me.
    I belive in friendship,
    suprisingly I do,
    and when I uncover my secrets to you,
    what I held so long,
    you just throw them in my face.
    I find it betrayal,
    when I open up,
    and you can't stand me for what I am.
    That is not real friendship,
    that's not what I expected from you,
    now I just wish you'd go away,
    and leave me the hell be.
     
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    fallenangel

    fallenangel Well-Known Member

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    i hear you...i wrote a poem on this very topic not that long ago and it felt good to get it out! the poem is not too bad cause i think it gives of more raw emotion than anything else and poetry can be a constructive release.

    so not bad work. bet you feel alittle better now, getting that out! ;)
     
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    Linja

    Linja Good. Be magnanimous. Über Member

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    I like it. No. I love it. It's got more raw emotion, i agree, than construction, so it's really good....I suck at the rawness lol...'ll make a poem and it'll be all raw but then I'll have to go back and edit it...compulsiveness lol....it's really good, raves and rants are of the good :p
     
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    a life in ashes

    a life in ashes mercury summer

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    nice, i really like it-real raw emotion
     

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