Inside(My song)

hey here is my song......... hope ya like it........
Please reply and or make corrections........

Song: Inside
Writer: Ryan Blain ( hehe that's me)

It's still left
that one side of my soul
that's tryin' to hide
but it's takin it's toll
I try to break away
away from it all
tryin' so hard to not slip and fall
but it all has been in vain
the fight to rid myself of this pain



**Chorus**

And all the pain I hide
it keeps goin farther down inside
when I try to keep it down
it all comes back again
my only friend
it's the pain I feel inside
the pain I have to hide


I try to carry on
like nothin was ever wrong
the face I fight with to
show it's me I Iied to
I've tried end it all
to stop these many falls
but it all has been in vain
the fight to rid myself of this pain



**Chorus**

I've tried to end it all
to avoid the falls
*Repeat 4 times*

**Chorusx2**

 

Thats sound awesome, but I think you need another verse between the two chours that in a row. Other than that sound good.

 

i like it

 

Well Done

 

do you play in a band or anything? or do u just write songs for fun?

 

thatz a good question and if ur not n a band you should defintaly start or join 1!!

 

I just started one and I'm the bassist....... I'm not good enough yet but we have a guy in our band who's been playin' electric and bass for 5 years so he can help me out a lot...........
Do you guys have any ideas for a name??

 

sweet job rybullet i like it