Nothing Fancy

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    LP_Freak_2735

    LP_Freak_2735 Well-Known Member

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    So this is me venting about how I'm feeling right now, and I threw it together in about a half hour, so it's not the best. I feel much better now that I got it out. And just to let you know, I don't cut anymore.

    Nothing Fancy
    I'm just another kid,
    running through the hallways.
    Crying, cutting my wrists.
    Silently I lay in pain,
    Left to die, with nothing to gain.
    Silently I scream in pain,
    Surely, I must be insane.

    I'm just another face,
    one more unsolved case.
    Try and find me in the crowd,
    I know I never made you proud.
    And now I'm left to die,
    with nothing to gain.
    Silently I scream in pain.
    Surely I am insane.

    And now I'm nothing fancy,
    left here to rot.
    I'll wait here until I'm caught,
    Hope is somewhere, but here it is not.
    Are you blind or do you just not see,
    What is happening to me.
    You've turned your back and left me to die,
    with nothing to gain.
    Can't you hear me scream, the pain.
    Show you what it's like to be insane.
     
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    fallenangel

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    i really like this one. you can feel the power and emotion coming from it and it shows that it was taken from the heart.

    glad to hear that you are not cutting anymore. i never did it myself but i have come very close to it on so many occations. writing is a very good outlet for frustrations and it's more constructive.

    good work on the poem and i hope everything is getting better with you and your ablity to cope with things. :hugz:
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    It sounds fine.
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    Nice work, I really like this, the raw emotion and power that have just spilled onto the page make it fantastic. It is not pretty and polished but that is what i like about it. It feels real, down to earth, like you wrote it from your heart. Which it sounds like you did since you were using it as a vent. Great work, i personally think this is one of my favourites. Amazing stuff.

    I especially like this
    It's like "Yoda" style. LOL :lol:
    Great work.
     
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    LP_Freak_2735

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    Thanks guys! ^_^
     

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