This is a song I wrote which was initially a possible entry for the lyrics competition. Because of my fear for its success, I decided not to enter it and post it after the end of the competition. Well, here it is. Without a doubt, this has to be the best thing I have ever written. - - - This is a story told from the view of a man who watched as his sons slipped right out of his hands 1 week before his before this birthday, what could he wish for then? So sit down, and let me begin. It was 3 years ago today when his first son was beat to death He crossed the line, he got what he had to expect The south side kids punished those who crossed the blood red line They watched day and night, if someone would cross in due time This line is not an image of the mind It's an actual line, crossing a city, stained with blood and grime This between-street divide was given its name When was blood was spilled upon it 6 years ago yesterday For 3 years, this city has been split into two A North and South side, and what's unbelievably true Is that these people aren't so different at all They just have a hard time accepting that things are their fault When this one man's son was killed by a south side gang His little brother got pissed and decided to make a change HIs only real want was to unite this place That was divided becase people think everyone else is to blame He had wanted this for the past 3 years He was sick and tired of having to live in fear Watch his parents in tears as they sat at home Alone, unaware their son was planning to go He left his house at midnight Took what he needed, locked his room tight He walked out the door and zipped up his coat As he gripped a spray can, a knife, and his notes He crossed the grime, opened the can, started at a wall of gray He started to pain, and when he'd be done, the wall would say: "Ladies and gentlemen, this city will fall If we don't unite at all, this is a call To all of you from the north and south sides For those who feel scared each and every night To those spending time guarding one stupid line To define that anybody who crosses should die What difference do we have from rags to riches? We are no different, just in different positions One person umemployed, another has a great job You're going to spill blood for this? Define your stupid law. This is a time for all of you to realize That inside, your hearts are all really the same size It's time to end the conflict, and stop the kills You killed my own brother for crossing to get milk I'm a young boy who lost his big brother today And I've come to write a message and say that today, we can change this place, and make it safe Please look inside yourselves before it's too late.." As he capped his can, six south side kids approached He pointed to the wall, took his knife and slit his own throat The kids stood in awe as they stared at the wall Couldn't believe what it said, as they started at it 'till dawn Hours passed and people gathered to see The body of a young boy dead in the street They read the letters sprayed on a wall of gray Taking in what this north side kid had to say The word spread, and eventually it reached the boy's dad Who lost in one week nearly everything he had He lost his sons to spite, and his wife to suicide One week before his birthday, didn't deserve this lfie Days passed in the town, and things appeared to have gotten better Everyone finally felt a little closer together How strange how people can change in a second All because a single boy made one powerful message As the city united, the red line was covered with a newly paved street Finally after years, the people made ends meet Although this one man lost his whole life in days He's proud of his son for what he had to say Now the deaths long gone, but the letters stay On the Gray that stays in the city today A wall that shows all the pain the strife From the hell that they used to call a life But because one boy and his strive to change things for the better Now everybody is a bit more closer together
As I said when you first sent me it; It's amazing. Still think you should have entered it into the comp though
I think it's brilliant not great no good job it's an excellent job could've won the comp with this ...
Man, you should have entered, would have been great to see how it did, because it’s very original. By the way, is there any truth, or if not, what was your inspiration?
To be honest with you, there was no direct inspiration for the song. I just thought in my head that I wanted to write something really, really good. It had to be powerful and express a point. So I thought of difference, and it made me think about a situation where a city is just divided because of differences people just won't accept. So the story sprung out of that.
That was really amazing. You could've one the contest with that one! Also, for some reason it reminded me of Kenji. I think it looks like something that Mike would write! Anyway, good job!
I know i say about all the poems I read they are good, but truly this is the best poem/song so far. I really cant believe how good it is. Im in awe. I bow down to you!