The Only Place You'll Find Someone as Ugly as You is the Mirror

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    esaul17

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    Here's to a bitter taste of emptiness
    The desolation shared by your kiss
    The lies that bled from your lips
    And the promises that spilt from your hips
    To all of the confusion you caused
    To each and every one of your flaws
    All that I had thought about us
    And all the words that you shushed
    You have nowhere to run
    This is the end to your fun
    Now you will pay for all that you've done

    Oh, I hope you feel the sting
    You've gone and destroyed everything
    Oh, I hope you feel the sting
    The time has come to clip your wings

    Held in the embrace of loneliness
    Here's your last look at all that you'll miss
    Do you think you'll regret your choice?
    This is the last time that you'll hear my voice
    Will you find love in all your priorities
    While being abandoned by all your authorities?
    Will you gather up all that you have left?
    The cumulation of your sex, tears, and theft
    The broken screams of despair
    Is it too much to bear?
    To realize there is no one left who will care

    Oh, I hope you feel the sting
    You've gone and destroyed everything
    Oh, I hope you feel the sting
    The time has come to clip your wings

    You're the black rose on the floor
    The love of a whore
    Left to lie here immobile and sore
    This is your grave
    And here I will wave
    Goodbye to the hopes that you can be saved
    I'll disappear
    Cherish your tears
    Stare at yourself alone in your mirror
    Here you will rot
    The lesson is taught
    Left to rest with all that has been forgot

    Oh, I hope you feel the sting
    You've gone and destroyed everything
    Oh, I hope you feel the sting
    The time has come to clip your wings

    Oh, I hope you feel the sting
    You've gone and destroyed everything
    Oh, I hope you feel the sting
    You will scream as I sing
     
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    Seinfeld

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    Nice lyrics. (I assume that's what this is.)

    I enjoyed it overall, but get the feeling that some rhymes were somewhat lacking. They just seemed to disturb the flow, to me.

    But as always, I liked your choice of words and images overall. (Especially loved the bits you kept repeating)
     
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    esaul17

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    Wow, didn't notice your comment! Yeah, I was writing quickly, so I let some of the rhymes get forced and the line lengths disrupt the flow. I was really just ticked and wanted to write SOMETHING. Thanks a lot for the comment!
     

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