This is just a rough draft, critique welcome. Can we continue what we never started? These thoughts collapse and I'm alone again We differ in so many ways but I still feel like I've known you for so long We're separated by this wall of Plagues that make us turn away And even though you're not immune to it I still feel that I should let you know I never left this place of silence It's in my mind how it's so hard to find yourself We'll never know how it's so controlling Why is this who you choose to be? How can you forget the ones who loved you? Hiding among perfect plastic toys I'd like to tear out my eyes to see How pathetic I've come to be I never left this place of silence It's in my mind how it's so hard to find yourself We'll never know how it's so controlling Who is this that's controlling you? This isn't who you are Do you remember when We helped you heal those scars? Now you've reopened them I've waited for so long But you're so lifeless now I want to love you but I can't remember how Do you even want this now? I never left this place of silence It's in my mind how it's so hard to find yourself We'll never know how it's so controlling Why is this who you choose to be? I never found that place of solace It's in my mind how it's so hard to find yourself We'll never know how it's so controlling Who is this that's controlling you? It's taking over you So let me fade away
I really like the lyrics. These two lines I really enjoy: "We differ in so many ways but I still feel like I've known you for so long" "I want to love you but I can't remember how" In situations like the lines describe it seems that confusion and denial are rampant. These lines seem to describe that. The only line I felt was a little long winded: "It's in my mind how it's so hard to find yourself" For being in the chorus section, it seem a bit long compared to the other lines. I believe it is a good set of words, maybe just break them into two lines or shorten them up a bit. Other than that nice work.
Thanks for actually saying something other than just "I like it". As for the odd line, I had thought up a long-short syllable thing with it, so with the music, it really does match up with the rest.