This time I'm taking it away, I've got a problem, When they getting in the way, Not by my side, So I take my face and bash it into a mirror I won't have to see the pain, This pain is elevating, As the hurt turns into hating, Anticipating I will fight the feelings again, My hurt inside is fading, This shit's gone way too far, All this time, I've been waiting, Oh I cannot breathe anymore. R&R this is by peter who couldn't get his own account because the site would not work...
this is good but i think the rhyming is alittle too forced. peter needs to try again to get on this site cause i think he has potential.
Totally agree, Peter needs to work more on what is being said and not the writting. i do see potential though.