understand me

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    Jon[athan]

    Jon[athan] Sincerly, written from my brothers blood machine.

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    FUCK! it's like world war three
    all this is building up inside me
    you ask me if im 'ok?'
    ya nothings wrong. i say
    why cant you see that my heart is bursting; my head is throbbing
    why cant you look deeper into my eyes
    why cant you see my LIES!

    i want you to know; i want you to open the door
    i want you to see that I CANT TAKE THIS ANYMORE
    i wouldnt ever tell you
    i wouldnt ever give you a clue
    if you cant figure me out
    then i am through

    please tell me you see whats wrong
    i've held this shit inside me for so long
    but i can see you will never tell; you will never know
    i want YOU to be happy now so GO
    leave me; i set you free


    that song is about how whenever i has something inside me i cant just let it go. i want, i NEED someone to understand and when no one does...it can be fatal.
     
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    LP_Freak_2735

    LP_Freak_2735 Well-Known Member

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    Maybe if it didn't start off with such a word, it would be even better than it already is. ^_^

    Good work though. Very nice.
     
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    Luke

    Luke Mind Your Manners. LPA Addicted VIP

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    Pretty good,maybe an advance in vocabulary might be good but still pretty good
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Nice job.
     
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    sickcycle

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    Yeah not necessarily bigger words, but more descriptive words, but I can image the song being sung by slipknot or the first verse by RATM
     

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