Music Detatched

Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by RyRy, Mar 16, 2014.

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    RyRy

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    One of my few attempts at writing anything, and the first I've posted here. Feedback is really appreciated. :)



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    Decay

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    Nice pianoline! You gotta turn up your voice, though, since it's not really audible.

    But nice job, really love the pianoline!
     
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    Really, really good. Turn up the vocals though, man.
     
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    Thank you guys for the feedback! :awesome:

    I made the piano intentionally louder than the vocals so they would drown them out, because I thought it made a cool effect and also my voice isn't great, but this is one of my first songs, so I still have much to improve on.



    Lyrics:
    I trust / I tried / I trust / No more
    Detached, I'm coming home / Detached, I'm running from, you
    Detached, I'm coming home / Detached, I'm running from, you
     
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    Decay

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    Add some reverb on your vocals. Deep voice there haha!

    Your singing doesn't sound terrible but you're out of key at times. Try practicing on that. But your voice by itself doesn't sound bad at all. With a bit of practice, it'll sound great! Keep it up! :chuck:
     

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